Mar 2, 2016

The Climb (Narrative)

        This is a narrative that my teacher told me to make and it has to be about the 3 climbers. We have to pick an ending to end the story. Hope you can enjoy this narrative. :)
   
    “Let’s go!” Chris said excitedly. Chris, Nick, and Zach are about to go mountain climbing, but it’s not an ordinary climb. They are about to climb the tallest mountain in the whole wide world, Mount Everest.
Chris, Nick, and Zach are preparing for the climb. “It’s going to be dangerous so you’d better prepare well for the journey.” Nick said. “Don’t worry guys! We are professionals remember?” Chris said confidently. They are actual professionals. Nick is a Meteorologist and does a lot of mountain climbing. Zach has climbed to the top of Mount Rainey in Washington, and Chris is a young business man that loves and practices mountain climbing.
            They start the dangerous journey with a determined heart to complete their journey. It is a tough journey. They have to climb the mountain carefully because one little mistake can cause a bad thing to happen. The sun is slowly going down and the temperature is dropping. The climbers decide to set a camp. They arrive on a flat area which is a good place to set the camp. They cook the food they bring on a fire that they make. They spend an uncomfortable night on the freezing mountain.
            The next day they wake up early and continue the journey. “Man, it’s freezing out here.” Zach said shivering. ‘That’s why we have to warm up ourselves by exercising.” Nick stated. They continue their journey up the steep mountain. “This is very tiring.” Chris said panting in exhaustion. Suddenly there is a sudden movement on the ground. “Do you hear that sound?” Zach asked “because I just heard a rumbling sound.” “Nope.” Chris answered unwillingly. The ground shakes again, but this time it is much harder. The ground stops shaking for a few seconds but is followed by another rumbling.
            “It’s a land slide!” Nick said. “Take cover behind that rock!” They run as fast as they can towards the rock. They can see the land slide rushing down. Nick and Chris jump to safe place just in time, but it is too late for Zach. Zach is pushed by the snow. The land slide pushes Zach towards a cliff. “Help! Save me!” Zach cried but it is too late for them to save him. He is pushed over the edge of the cliff and Chris and Nick watch him fall helplessly.
            After the landslide, they rush to see if Zach is still alive. Thankfully, Zach is saved by a small ledge. The bad news is that Zach injures his leg. He cannot walk. They try to throw him a rope to pull him up but the rope isn’t long enough. They watch him helplessly. Suddenly Nick has an idea. “We can get help if we go back to the city.” Nick said. Zach doesn’t like this idea. He is going to be left alone in the ledge with an injured leg. “Is there another idea?” Zach asked. They can’t think of anything better. “This is the only possibility to save you Zach.” Chris said.
            Chris and Nick decide to go down the mountain to get help as Zach hopes that he will be saved. In order to save Zach they have to get help fast before Zach gets ill. Will they make it? Will Zach be saved? It all depends on Nick and Chris to save Zach.

2 comments:

  1. The first thing to say is, your story has a very interesting structure. The second of all is, you have a great grammar as I can't see much grammatical error. I like how you include some humor in the story and how you decide to do a cliff hanger at the end because that just make the story more interesting. Keep up the good work!

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  2. The first thing to say is, your story has a very interesting structure. The second of all is, you have a great grammar as I can't see much grammatical error. I like how you include some humor in the story and how you decide to do a cliff hanger at the end because that just make the story more interesting. Keep up the good work!

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